The poem brought together a full story for me. Someone speeding in a car, an accident, the deceased looking back on her/his moment of spontaneity and realizing it wasn’t worth it. I also like how you left the last line open for interpretation. For me, it is asked with the understanding that the apology isn’t enough.
This could equally be titled A Parent’s Dread At Having Teenaged Drivers. It’s not as catchy, but wow this is my living fear (and I’m sure you understand that only too well).
Wow! Completely unrecognizable from the original text. I love how simple yet haunting your erasure is 😀
The poem brought together a full story for me. Someone speeding in a car, an accident, the deceased looking back on her/his moment of spontaneity and realizing it wasn’t worth it. I also like how you left the last line open for interpretation. For me, it is asked with the understanding that the apology isn’t enough.
This could equally be titled A Parent’s Dread At Having Teenaged Drivers. It’s not as catchy, but wow this is my living fear (and I’m sure you understand that only too well).
I loved how you teased out something so radically different from the original text. And to tell so much in so few words!
Ooh, so much in so few words. Not so easy to do, but you did it well.
Whoa, intense. It conveys so much emotion and story in such a short space.
You used a great selection of words here to create a simple story with a big impact. I love how this form brings life to old words.